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مشاهدة النسخة كاملة : Not Yet



أم ورقة
01-01-2008, 09:11 PM
Time has not
come yet
Things have not
been set
so how would
goals be met?


when things
are farther
than I can get
more patience
is of no
regret

مقاوم
01-02-2008, 04:15 AM
when things
are farthest
than I get
more patience
is no regret

I did not quite get the meaning here. i
Did you mean to say : "then I get"? i

من هناك
01-02-2008, 04:55 AM
Farther than what I get

أم ورقة
01-02-2008, 09:48 AM
Things are farthest than I can reach

or can get

سـمـاح
01-02-2008, 10:18 AM
Things are farthest than I can reach





or can get



It should be farther than, not farthest.


Masha Allah, your poems are very nice. I especially like the
music in them




more patience




is no regret



I would have said :

more patience
is of no regret

No peom for today ?

مقاوم
01-02-2008, 10:26 AM
Consider this:
When things are
Beyond my reach
"More patience"
Is what I preach

أم ورقة
01-02-2008, 10:30 AM
Consider this:



When things are
Beyond my reach
"More patience"


Is what I preach


good suggestion
but I liked the sound of the "t" at the end that's why
I prefer to stick to it

as for the previous suggestions I'll take them into consideration
and make some modification

thanks Samah for sharing :)

مقاوم
01-02-2008, 10:50 AM
ok, how about:
When things are scarce
And hard to get
More patience is
of no regret